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Hi Natalia!
ResponderEliminarThis is our ending of "The Hobbit":
When Bilbo was going to destroy the ring, something strange happened and he decided to throw it to the ocean, but when he throw it away, the ring came back to the shore but Bilbo didn't realize it.
Then, another man found it and the ring possessed him. The ring wanted to take revenge on Bilbo so the man killed Bilbo with a spear but then, the man killed himself because he felt bad with what he had done so he took a rock and he hit his head and died.
Constanza Pucci, Martina de Pinto, Lola González, Mateo Milione, Danila del Río
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EliminarVery interesting and gripping ending! It is very well written! Good job!
EliminarHowever, what would you change in the following sentences?
a)"but when he throw it away": which is the past tense of "throw"? Remember that you wrote the story in the past tense.
b) "but Bilbo didn't realize it. " : In this phrase, it should be "Bilbo didn't realize about it". In English, we say that someone realises about something. You can spell "realise" with "s" (British English) or with "z" (American English.)
Please, correct those mistakes and the rest is perfect!
Hi Ms. Natalia!
ResponderEliminarThis is our ending for "Dracula":
Dracula is at the verge of death, Minas standing over him, blood spilt over the cold ground. Dracula feels he has no hope.
"Any last words?" says Minas, sneering.
Dracula remains silent. He's thinking about is long life: His many love affairs, his family, the people he killed... The many, many people he killed. "I'm a monster" he thinks. "Now I finally understand why nobody ever really loved me. I deserve to..."
His thoughts were interrupted by a sudden bang. It was Lucy. She had fired a gun. The bullet had sunken into Minas' body. He gave a loud howl, clearly in pain.
"This is over" said Lucy fiercely.
Minas fell to the ground, dead. Lucy helped Dracula off the pool of his own blood.
"I saved your life. But just this once." said Lucy before she turned to leave.
"How can I repay you?" asked Dracula, wondering if she loved him as much as he loved her. Lucy stopped in her tracks, and turned to face Dracula. Her eyes were filled with angry tears, and between clenched teeth she said "Stay away from me. I haven't forgiven you."
She turned her back on Dracula, and walked away. It was not till sunrise that Dracula left the spot were he lost his only chance to have a normal life.
By: Cora Forcatto, Maximo Arata, Lucio Rassullo, and Maximiliano Tesolin.
This is a very passionate and intense ending! The quality of the writing is excellent! Well done!
EliminarHowever, there are few things to correct:
1. The name of the character is "Mina", not "Minas".
2. In this sentence. "He's thinking about is long life" : Did you mean to write "his" instead of "is"?
Just correct those two things and the rest is perfect!
And that is how I left. Leaving so much behind consumed every part of me, every feeling I could have ever felt. It was not his fault I know… but being speechless to me all this time, it was unnecessary. Though I am just saying meaningless words. He is already married and there is nothing I could do.
ResponderEliminarI could still hear his voice, but at the same time silence was around me and surrounded me. I could never forget him; I could never forget his heart. What about Adele? I didn’t say goodbye to her…
Then I felt into the wet grass. I would not even try to get up so there I was, isolated from my own mind and body.
Now, it’s been a year since I left. Rochester died. I admit I was in pain for weeks because I really loved him but now it’s all different. Rochester was actually killed by the mad wife who was locked in her own castle and walls. She took revenge and nobody found out. Maybe we all know but there are no proves for the argument. He was not a bad person and he didn’t mean bad for her. I am staying to live in the castle with his killer, his mad wife. I know it sounds morbid but she asked me to. After all we have been through we think it is what we must do. We must forget.
(ending- Jane Eyre- Malena Dobal, Fcundo Garcia Beraudi y Laura Gallardo)
This is a very spellbinding and unpredictable ending! It is beautifully written. Well done!
EliminarHowever, there are some things to correct:
a) "Then I felt into the wet grass.": In this sentence, you wrote "felt" which is the past tense of "feel". Which is the past tense of "fall"? I think you meant to use "fall" in the past.
b) "Maybe we all know but there are no proves for the argument." : In this sentence, the word should be "proofs"; "to prove" is the verb. "Proof" is the noun you need.
Just correct those things and the rest is perfect!